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It's that time of year, again! Sun, rain, pretty flowers, and time for me to get my spring/summer handbag!
My Mom read a bunch more of the book and talked to me about it yesterday. She commented on what I already knew was a problem: the first half - three quarters has some pacing issues I need to fix. She gave me some good thoughts on how to do that and include more character stuff for Adric and Dom so they don't seem quite as side-character-ish. She also thinks Elysia is over-confident and thus not super likeable. I think I'll wait for other beta feedback before deciding she's right, but Mom is pretty discerning about such things. She thinks adding a couple of vampire kills into the first couple chapters will add weight to the character's confidence, and she's probably right.
I should have made her wait to tell me this stuff until after I was done with the first draft, though. Cause now I just want to go back and fix this stuff, and I won't let myself. "Complete first draft" is number one, fix things is number two!
She hasn't yet gotten to really explicit scenes, or the wolves. Though she's about to.
Oh, and one minor fannishthing rant.
My Mom read a bunch more of the book and talked to me about it yesterday. She commented on what I already knew was a problem: the first half - three quarters has some pacing issues I need to fix. She gave me some good thoughts on how to do that and include more character stuff for Adric and Dom so they don't seem quite as side-character-ish. She also thinks Elysia is over-confident and thus not super likeable. I think I'll wait for other beta feedback before deciding she's right, but Mom is pretty discerning about such things. She thinks adding a couple of vampire kills into the first couple chapters will add weight to the character's confidence, and she's probably right.
I should have made her wait to tell me this stuff until after I was done with the first draft, though. Cause now I just want to go back and fix this stuff, and I won't let myself. "Complete first draft" is number one, fix things is number two!
She hasn't yet gotten to really explicit scenes, or the wolves. Though she's about to.
Oh, and one minor fannish
